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What are your thoughts on the small size of your country?

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I think my county size is very small because for example China, USA, Russia is very big Korea is not small either but there are many big countries next to my country Chian, Russia, Japan so I feel like my country is small.

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                             What are your thoughts on the small size of your country?


I think my county size is very small because for example China, USA, Russia is very big Korea is not small either but there are many big countries next to my country Chian, Russia, Japan so I feel like my country is small.
>>> I think my country is very small because, for example, China, the USA, and Russia are very big. Korea is not small either, but there are many big countries near my country, like China, Russia, and Japan, so I feel like my country is small.
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