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Is there a traditional tale or story that you consider the best? Why do you think so?

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Well, I thought or a very traditional story. It may be a story that everyone knows, but it's the story or a rabbit and a turtle.
This story is about a rabbit and a turtle running competition, and the fast rabbit was arrogant, naturally thought myself would win, but the slow turtle won the competition.
When I was young, I heard this story, it was a story that gave children the realization that I should always do my best without being complacement, but whe I grow up and listen to this story again, I feel different. It seems to make me realize that working hard is important and I have to do my best, and the results are important, but the process is also important.
These days, people value results more than processes, but the story that you can get good results if you keep going, even if it's slow and difficult, will give people an enlightenment. I think it's a necessary story for society right now.

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Hello, 

Thank you so much for sharing this story with me. 
I really like the realization you had about the story, and I totally agree with it. 
As they say, we may have started at the same time, but we all have our own challenges as we go on, so we may reach our goals faster or slower than others. But the most important thing is we tried our best and still got there. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


Well, I thought or a very traditional story. 
>> Well, I thought of a very traditional story.

It may be a story that everyone knows, but it's the story or a rabbit and a turtle.
>>  It may be a story that everyone knows, but it's the story of a rabbit and a turtle.

This story is about a rabbit and a turtle running competition, and the fast rabbit was arrogant, naturally thought myself would win, but the slow turtle won the competition.
>> This story is about a running competition between a rabbit and a turtle. The fast rabbit was arrogant and naturally thought he would win, but the slow turtle won in the end.

When I was young, I heard this story, it was a story that gave children the realization that I should always do my best without being complacement, but whe I grow up and listen to this story again, I feel different. 
>> When I was young, I heard this story. It taught children to always do their best without being complacent. But when I grew up and listened to it again, I felt differently.

It seems to make me realize that working hard is important and I have to do my best, and the results are important, but the process is also important.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: It reminds me that effort and consistency are just as valuable as the outcome.

These days, people value results more than processes, but the story that you can get good results if you keep going, even if it's slow and difficult, will give people an enlightenment. 
>> These days, people value results more than the process. But this story teaches us that if we keep going- even slowly and with difficulty- we can still achieve great results.

I think it's a necessary story for society right now.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I believe it¡¯s a meaningful story for today¡¯s society.
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