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Above all, I would be annoyed by this inconvenience that I would need to face. And I would be absolutely at a loss about what to say because two parties don¡¯t seem to have any consideration for the other. They don¡¯t seem to back down an inch from their stance. Government and medical community, two organizations for serving people look competitively bothering people, clinging to their own positions. I wouldn¡¯t accept this situations where many innocent people became scapegoats for their arguments. Some people could get worse in their medical condition or die after they lose their golden time to treat. In some sense, we can see their true colors hidden under all along through this conflicts. Two must get back to their old good mindset to serve people and they mustn¡¯t delay a day to solve this issue before it¡¯s too late to resolve it. We shouldn't forget that a stitch in time saves nine. Two parties have to come to the negotiating table and get ready to listen to the other in their shoes

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Hello Steve. Your writing shows strong critical thinking and a sincere desire to speak up for the people affected by this situation. You used compelling expressions and vivid metaphors, which made your message powerful. Just be mindful of article usage (¡°a,¡± ¡°the¡±), word choice, and sentence clarity to make your points even stronger. Keep up this passionate and thoughtful writing. It¡¯s truly meaningful.

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Above all, I would be annoyed by this inconvenience that I would need to face.
>> Above all, I would be annoyed by the inconvenience I would have to face.

And I would be absolutely at a loss about what to say because two parties don¡¯t seem to have any consideration for the other.
>> I would also be completely at a loss for words because the two parties don¡¯t seem to have any consideration for each other.

They don¡¯t seem to back down an inch from their stance.
>> CORRECT

Government and medical community, two organizations for serving people look competitively bothering people, clinging to their own positions.
>> The government and the medical community, two organizations meant to serve people, seem to be competing and causing inconvenience while clinging to their own positions.

I wouldn¡¯t accept this situations where many innocent people became scapegoats for their arguments.
>> I wouldn¡¯t accept this situation where many innocent people become scapegoats for their arguments.

Some people could get worse in their medical condition or die after they lose their golden time to treat.
>> Some people¡¯s medical conditions could worsen, or they could die if they miss the golden window for treatment.

In some sense, we can see their true colors hidden under all along through this conflicts.
>> In a way, we can see their true colors that have been hidden all along through this conflict.

Two must get back to their old good mindset to serve people and they mustn¡¯t delay a day to solve this issue before it¡¯s too late to resolve it.
>> Both parties must return to their original mindset of serving the people, and they must not delay even a day in solving this issue before it becomes too late.

We shouldn't forget that a stitch in time saves nine.
>> CORRECT

Two parties have to come to the negotiating table and get ready to listen to the other in their shoes.
>> The two parties have to come to the negotiating table and be ready to put themselves in each other¡¯s shoes.

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