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The saddest time I had as a kid

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When I was at 10 years old, I heard the news that my grandfather suddenly passed away. I was very shocked because we're meant to travel that weekend. he always had given me true love, so calling with him was my best time in my youth. It was too hard to accept for me. Since my daughter was born, my father sometimes tell me that he miss his father and I also do miss my grandfather.

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A pleasant afternoon, Ben!
I am sorry to recall this hurtful event when you were young.  Losing someone you love can shake your whole world, it¡¯s like a piece of you is missing. Though grieving takes time, it will build you to become a stronger person. 
Enjoy your weekend!
Aki~

When I was at 10 years old, I heard the news that my grandfather suddenly passed away.
>>>  When I was 10 years old, I heard the news that my grandfather had suddenly passed away.

I was very shocked because we're meant to travel that weekend.
>>>  CORRECT!

he always had given me true love, so calling with him was my best time in my youth.
>>>  He always gave me true love, so calling with him was my best time in my youth.

It was too hard to accept for me. 
>>> CORRECT!

Since my daughter was born, my father sometimes tell me that he miss his father and I also do miss my grandfather.
>>>  Since my daughter was born, my father sometimes tells me that he misses his father, and I also miss my grandfather.
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