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Do you think remote working will be more common in the future? How about in Korea (would this system

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Despite the growing trend of remote working, I believe office work will be more prevalent. The reason why the remote working will be least common in the future is due to the concern of communications and evaluation system. First, there are communication issues. Despite there are many apps available for video conference, it cannot overcome time difference when it comes to instant communication. Since there are delays in communications, many people still prefer face-to-face communication. Then there are concerns in the employee evaluation system. Even with technological development, many employees still game the system, and many managers have a hard time getting track of their employees’ overall performances. Also, according to the recent study from OECD, regardless of the performance many managers tend to give high evaluation to the employee that they can face frequently. Accordingly, even with the tectological development and employee preference, office work will be more common.

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Thank you for this Aciel!

Despite the growing trend of remote working, I believe office work will be more prevalent. 
>>> correct
>>> OR: Despite the growing trend of remote working, I believe office work will still be the norm.  
The reason why the remote working will be least common in the future is due to the concern of communications and evaluation system. 
>>>  The reason why remote working will be less common in the future is due to the concerns of communications and evaluation system. 
First, there are communication issues. 
>>> correct 
Despite there are many apps available for video conference, it cannot overcome time difference when it comes to instant communication. 
>>>  Despite having many apps available for video conference, it cannot overcome time difference when it comes to instant communication. 
Since there are delays in communications, many people still prefer face-to-face communication. 
>>>   correct 
Then there are concerns in the employee evaluation system. 
>>>  OR: Then there are concerns about the employee evaluation system. 
Even with technological development, many employees still game the system, and many managers have a hard time getting track of their employees’ overall performances. 
>>> Even with technological development, many employees still take advantage of the loopholes of the system, and many managers have a hard time keeping track of their employees’ overall performances.  
Also, according to the recent study from OECD, regardless of the performance, many managers tend to give high evaluation to the employee that they can face frequently. 
>>>  correct
Accordingly, even with the tectological development and employee preference, office work will be more common.
>>>  Accordingly, even with the technological development and employees' preference, office work will be more common.
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