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What do you think and feel when you see police cars?

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I think and feel when I see police cars I think they are scary and cool because When the siren goes off Korean people say \"they are coming to get you!\" so I scared police cars

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I think and feel when I see police cars I think they are scary and cool because When the siren goes off Korean people say "they are coming to get you!" so I scared police cars 
>> I feel that police cars are both scary and cool. When the siren goes off, Korean people often say, 'They are coming to get you!' That makes me feel scared of police cars.
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