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Is giving up some privacy the price we pay for convenience?

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In my perspective, privacy should not be compromised in any circumstance. Many people believe that people prioritize short term benefit and immediate convenience over potential adverse impact on privacy and they call it the private paradox. However, prioritizing convenience and sacrificing privacy have trade-offs such as data breaches and losing control of data autonomy. First, there is a risk of data breaches and misuse which can lead to identity theft, financial loss and reputational damage. For instance, there are identity thefts costing UK 4 billion pounds per year. The thefts include the passport, social security information and bank statements. Then there is the issue of losing control of data autonomy. Maintaining data autonomy is about self-governance and control over data. By ensuring data owners retain control even if external parties try to gain access. Giving up privacy can erode personal control over one¡¯s data and potentially lead to unintended consequences.

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Thank you for this Aciel!

In my perspective, privacy should not be compromised in any circumstance. 
>>>  OR: From my perspective, privacy should not be compromised under any circumstance. 
Many people believe that people prioritize short term benefit and immediate convenience over potential adverse impact on privacy and they call it the private paradox. 
>>>  correct 
However, prioritizing convenience and sacrificing privacy have trade-offs such as data breaches and losing control of data autonomy. 
>>>   correct
>>> OR: However, prioritizing convenience over privacy comes with some trade-offs such as data breaches and losing control of data autonomy. 
First, there is a risk of data breaches and misuse which can lead to identity theft, financial loss and reputational damage. 
>>>    correct
For instance, there are identity thefts costing UK 4 billion pounds per year. 
>>>    correct
The thefts include the passport, social security information and bank statements. 
>>>   correct
Then there is the issue of losing control of data autonomy. 
>>>    correct
>> ORThen comes the issue of losing control over data autonomy. 
Maintaining data autonomy is about self-governance and control over data. 
>>>  correct
By ensuring data owners retain control even if external parties try to gain access. 
>>>  correct
Giving up privacy can erode personal control over one¡¯s data and potentially lead to unintended consequences.
>>>  correct
>>> OR: Giving up privacy can erode personal control over one¡¯s data and potentially lead to undesirable consequences.
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