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my famiiy usually go fishing or farming.
my parents were famer and my elder sisiter is famer too.
we have to plant potato and havest. it need to help.
we spent lot of time summer vacation and farming .
It is so hard but fun.

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Hi, Grace^^
Thank you for sharing.
I guess everything can be fun if done together. 
_T. SHAY^^
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my famiiy usually go fishing or farming.
>>My family usually goes fishing or farming.
OR: My family usually spends time fishing and farming.
my parents were famer and my elder sisiter is famer too.
>>My parents were farmers and my elder sister is a farmer too.
we have to plant potato and havest. 
>>We have to plant potatoes and harvest.
it need to help.
>>They need help in doing those things.
we spent lot of time summer vacation and farming .
>>We spent a lot of time in the farm during summer vacation.
It is so hard but fun.
>>Correct
OR: It's not easy to farm, but it's fun.
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