¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

The homework for 30th April.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: Á¶*È£
2025-04-30 852

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

Q : Why is fast food so popular?

A : In my view, in Korea, fast food is so popular especially during lunch time.
Since most Korean company`s lunch time is an hour, we don`t have a choice.
Also, since the price of housing is very high, many Koreans waste their times to commute.
So, they need to save time by eating fast food.
That is the reason why fast food is so popular in Korea.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Hello Eddy!
Thank you for your thoughtful writing! You explained your ideas well. Just a quick tip: watch for small grammar points like using ¡°companies¡± instead of ¡°company's¡± and ¡°much time¡± or ¡°a lot of time¡± instead of ¡°their times.¡± Great job! keep it up!
~~Teacher Kate 

In my view, in Korea, fast food is so popular especially during lunch time.
>>In my view, in Korea, fast food is very popular, especially during lunch time. 
Since most Korean company`s lunch time is an hour, we don`t have a choice.
>>Since most Korean companies have only one hour for lunch, we don¡¯t have many choices.
Also, since the price of housing is very high, many Koreans waste their times to commute.
>>Also, because housing prices are very high, many Koreans waste time commuting. 
So, they need to save time by eating fast food.
>>CORRECT!
That is the reason why fast food is so popular in Korea.
>>CORRECT!


¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
142986 3/11 Homework ±Ç*ºó ¿Ï·á 2025-03-12 2
142985 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2025-03-12 988
142984 s Á¶*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-12 1047
142983 I want to __? ±è*Áø ¿Ï·á 2025-03-12 0
142982 Saju ¾ç*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-12 1108
142981 Do you somewhat consider yourself VIP? ÀÌ*Áß ¿Ï·á 2025-03-12 1
142980 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 1
142979 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 0
142978 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 1
142977 What are the technical requirements for schools to adopt AI... ±è*°æ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 1090
142976 If you could be anywhere right now where would you be? Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 1020
142975 How to avoid too much talker ±è*±æ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 894
142974 What are your thoughts on power interruptions? Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 874
142973 What are your thoughts on the USA today? Â÷*Çõ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 911
142972 What would you say is the biggest challenge for you moving and... ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 853
142971 Do you think the influence of influencers is here to stay, or do... ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 854
142970 Homework ±è*¼÷ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 880
142969 What are some famous snacks in Korea? ÀÌ*ÈÆ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 920
142968 How do accents influence perceptions of a speaker\'s nationality... ÀÌ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 0
142967 . ±è*ÀÎ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-11 909

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04