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Q : Why is fast food so popular?

A : In my view, in Korea, fast food is so popular especially during lunch time.
Since most Korean company`s lunch time is an hour, we don`t have a choice.
Also, since the price of housing is very high, many Koreans waste their times to commute.
So, they need to save time by eating fast food.
That is the reason why fast food is so popular in Korea.

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Hello Eddy!
Thank you for your thoughtful writing! You explained your ideas well. Just a quick tip: watch for small grammar points like using ¡°companies¡± instead of ¡°company's¡± and ¡°much time¡± or ¡°a lot of time¡± instead of ¡°their times.¡± Great job! keep it up!
~~Teacher Kate 

In my view, in Korea, fast food is so popular especially during lunch time.
>>In my view, in Korea, fast food is very popular, especially during lunch time. 
Since most Korean company`s lunch time is an hour, we don`t have a choice.
>>Since most Korean companies have only one hour for lunch, we don¡¯t have many choices.
Also, since the price of housing is very high, many Koreans waste their times to commute.
>>Also, because housing prices are very high, many Koreans waste time commuting. 
So, they need to save time by eating fast food.
>>CORRECT!
That is the reason why fast food is so popular in Korea.
>>CORRECT!


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