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Can you share about the most memorable commercial you have ever seen? Why?

작성자: 이*윤
2025-04-30 1007

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Well, it's not a Korea commercial, but I remember it was a China or Thailand commercial.
A young boy was caught by owner while stealing food from a restaurant as he couldn't overcome his hunger. But owner didn't get angry at the boy, even didn't get paid and gave him some food.
After a long time, owner was hospitalized for surgery due to his poor health, and when he tried to calculate the hospital fee, it was written on the paper that "The hospital bill was paid a long time agd." and the boy who stole the food grew up to become a doctor and recognized the owner who helped him and returned the favor.
When I saw this commercial, it was so touching and made me sad. I was forced to focus on the his commercial, I also shocked it with a surprising twist. So, it is the most memorable commercial.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi! 

Thank you for sharing your answer with me. 
Wow! This is really awesome. Reading what happened in the commercial touched me.
I haven't seen it, but you described it well. I think this commercial is really good. 
I think aside from knowing the brands or the products, it gives an impact on the lessons we can learn from it. 
As they say, what goes around comes around. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina


Well, it's not a Korea commercial, but I remember it was a China or Thailand commercial.
>> Well, it wasn’t a Korean commercial- I think it was either Chinese or Thai.

A young boy was caught by owner while stealing food from a restaurant as he couldn't overcome his hunger. 
>> A young boy was caught by the owner while stealing food from a restaurant because he couldn’t bear his hunger.

But owner didn't get angry at the boy, even didn't get paid and gave him some food.
>> But the owner didn’t get angry or ask for payment; instead, he gave the boy some food.

After a long time, owner was hospitalized for surgery due to his poor health, and when he tried to calculate the hospital fee, it was written on the paper that "The hospital bill was paid a long time agd." 
>> Years later, the owner was hospitalized for surgery due to poor health. When he received the bill, a note was written on it: “The hospital bill was paid a long time ago.”

and the boy who stole the food grew up to become a doctor and recognized the owner who helped him and returned the favor.
>> The boy who once stole food had grown up to become a doctor. He recognized the owner and returned the favor by paying his hospital bill.

When I saw this commercial, it was so touching and made me sad. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Watching that commercial moved me and made me feel quite emotional.
 
I was forced to focus on the his commercial, I also shocked it with a surprising twist. 
>> I couldn’t take my eyes off the commercial, and I was shocked by the unexpected twist.
>> Or: It captured my full attention, and the ending took me by surprise.

So, it is the most memorable commercial.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: That’s why it remains the most unforgettable commercial for me.
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