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I agree that person's character do affect the beauty of the person, and I think it highly affects it.
When meeting new people, the first thing that we perceive is definitely their appearance but that only lasts for a few seconds. Our focus moves on right away to the person's characters. It is naturally revealed as we talk and work together. Therefore, characters have more effect on beauty of that person even though the first sight was intense.
I also believe that people feel beauty in a comprehensive way. To be more descriptive, I think people naturally have a tendency to estimate the beauty through overall characteristics not only by one side. Thus I think people will feel specific person beautiful as they they take time and get to know about the person's inner parts.

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Hello, Ms. WooIn! I totally agree that a person's character really affects how beautiful they seem. When we meet someone for the first time, we definitely notice how they look. But that first impression only lasts a few seconds. After that, our attention shifts to who they are.
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I agree that person's character do affect the beauty of the person, and I think it highly affects it.
>>I agree that a person's character does affect their beauty, and I believe it has a significant impact.

When meeting new people, the first thing that we perceive is definitely their appearance but that only lasts for a few seconds. 
>>Correct!
Our focus moves on right away to the person's characters. It is naturally revealed as we talk and work together. 
>>Our focus quickly shifts to the person's character, which is naturally revealed as we talk and work together.
Therefore, characters have more effect on beauty of that person even though the first sight was intense.
>>Therefore, character has a stronger effect on a person¡¯s beauty, even though the initial impression might be intense.

I also believe that people feel beauty in a comprehensive way. 
>>I also believe that people perceive beauty in a more holistic way.
To be more descriptive, I think people naturally have a tendency to estimate the beauty through overall characteristics not only by one side. 
>>To be more specific, I think people naturally tend to assess beauty based on overall characteristics, not just one aspect.
Thus I think people will feel specific person beautiful as they they take time and get to know about the person's inner parts.
>>Thus, I believe people will find someone beautiful as they take the time to get to know the person¡¯s inner qualities.
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