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Why is fast food so popular?

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I love fast food as much as slow food. I think many people like fast food because of quickness, taste.
And There are many franchise all around the world. So If we travel strange country, When we hard to eat strange food,
we can choose fast food. It's almost full-proof.

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Hello Gonnie!
Thank you for your great effort! You shared clear and interesting ideas. Just a quick tip: be careful with word choice (like ¡°foolproof¡± instead of ¡°full-proof¡±) and sentence structure, try to avoid starting too many sentences with ¡°And¡± or ¡°So.¡± Keep practicing! you¡¯re doing really well!


I love fast food as much as slow food. 
>>CORRECT!
I think many people like fast food because of quickness, taste.
>>I think many people like fast food because of its quickness and taste.
And There are many franchise all around the world. So If we travel strange country, When we hard to eat strange food, we can choose fast food. 
>>There are many franchises all around the world, so if we travel to a foreign country and find it hard to eat unfamiliar food, we can choose fast food.
It's almost full-proof.
>>It's almost foolproof.


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