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Even though we have the decision right we often repeat unwise choices.

A classic case is when we get married.

At that time we lost rational thinking power and fall into temptation by bad business and wrong desires.

In the end we waste big money regret showing off.
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Good afternoon, Ms. Lily!
Yes, I wonder too.. Many people are spending lavishly on their weddings and end up getting separated or divorced. Like, everything was a show. SO many people just laugh at them because of this,
Thank you! have a good afternoon!
Aki~


Even though we have the decision right we often repeat unwise choices.
>>> Even though we have the right decision, we often repeat unwise choices.

A classic case is when we get married.
>>> CORRECT!

At that time we lost rational thinking power and fall into temptation by bad business and wrong desires.
>>> At that time, we lost rational thinking  and fell into temptation by bad business and wrong desires.

In the end we waste big money regret showing off.
>>> In the end, we waste a lot of money on regretting showing off.
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