¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

.

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*ÀÎ
2025-05-07 1110

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

There are several problems cause by overtoursim.
First, private lives of people who live near the tour area can be intruded. The houses that native people live in may be a good landscape for tourists to take memorable photo. However in this process, some of the private lives are exposed inevitably and unintentionally, and the noise that made in the middle can also hamper the personal lives of native people. Moreover, I also heard that some tourists go into the house without permission to take better photo with interior parts as a background.
Second, original culture can be transformed or fade away. As the number of tourist increases and overtakes the number of native people, it is possible for the culture to change, because natives are not majority anymore. This can harm the value of the place with genuine culture, and eventually diminishes the virtue of that place for a tour.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Thank you for this U In! 

There are several problems cause by overtoursim.
>>>  There are several problems caused by over-tourism.
First, private lives of people who live near the tour area can be intruded. 
>>>  correct
The houses that native people live in may be a good landscape for tourists to take memorable photo. 
>>>  The houses where/that local people live in may be a good landscape for tourists to take memorable photos. 
However in this process, some of the private lives are exposed inevitably and unintentionally, and the noise that made in the middle can also hamper the personal lives of native people. 
>>> However in this process, some of the private lives are exposed inevitably and unintentionally, and the noise created during the process can also hamper the personal lives of native/local people.  
Moreover, I also heard that some tourists go into the house without permission to take better photo with interior parts as a background.
>>>  Moreover, I heard that some tourists even go into the house without permission to take a better photo with the interior parts as a background.
Second, original culture can be transformed or fade away. 
>>> correct 
As the number of tourist increases and overtakes the number of native people, it is possible for the culture to change, because natives are not majority anymore. 
>>As the number of tourists increases and overtakes the number of native people, it is possible for the culture to change, because natives are not the majority anymore.  
This can harm the value of the place with genuine culture, and eventually diminishes the virtue of that place for a tour.
>>>  correct 
>>> OR: This can harm the authenticity of the place with a genuine culture, and eventually diminishes the value of that place as a tourist spot.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
143146 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2025-03-20 891
143145 Homework ÀÌ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 893
143144 Eariler reading ÃÖ*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 953
143143 homework ±è*Àº ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 899
143142 Homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 2
143141 HOMEWORK 3/19 ±è*¼Ö ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 944
143140 My favorite season is spring ±è*¿î ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 828
143139 I¡®ve never played Tic-Tac-Toe game. À¯*ºó ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 679
143138 Which do you prefer, online shopping or in-person shopping? Why? ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 925
143137 . ±è*ÀÎ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 832
143136 . ±è*ÀÎ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 970
143135 1. What do you know about the Kleine-Levin syndrome (KLS), also... ÀÌ*Áß ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 2
143134 What¡¯s the most exciting project you¡¯ve worked on so far? ¸Í*¿µ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 794
143133 What activities disrupt a healthy lifestyle? ÀÌ*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 1
143132 Which form of transport do you like taking most? ¼Û*ÀÚ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 1
143131 team sports and team work_2 ¾î*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 2
143130 The homework for 18th March. Á¶*È£ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 898
143129 team sports and team work_1 ¾î*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 2
143128 2025.03.19 homework! ÀÌ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 906
143127 grammar check Àå*È£ ¿Ï·á 2025-03-19 5

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04