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I would like to make washing hair machine. Washing hair make me bother. When I went to hair salon, they washed my hair, I felt very comfortable and sleepy. I thought if I have washing hair machine, I could wash my hair easily. The hair salon could use it can save time. And we can easily care old people and disabled person. I just lie down, the machine will washing my hair, dry it. I just thinking about it, l feel very comfortable. I want to someone make this machine.

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Hello there,

Time is really very fast these days. We just have to take it easy and do things in the right path.

Growing and developing yourself, it could be as simple as learning one new thing a day, so take one step at a time.

T. Jeny


I would like to make washing hair machine. 
>>I would like to make a machine for washing my hair.
Washing hair make me bother. 
>>Washing my hair makes me bother. 
When I went to hair salon, they washed my hair, I felt very comfortable and sleepy.
>>When I went to the hair salon, they washed my hair, I felt very comfortable and sleepy.
 I thought if I have washing hair machine, I could wash my hair easily.
>> I thought if I had a washing hair machine, I could wash my hair easily.
 The hair salon could use it can save time. 
>>correct
And we can easily care old people and disabled person. 
>>And we can easily take care of the old people and disabled people. 
I just lie down, the machine will washing my hair, dry it. I just thinking about it, l feel very comfortable.
>>I would just lie down and the machine wouldwash and dry my hair. Just thinking of it, make me feel comfortable.
 I want to someone make this machine.
>>correct
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