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Are there pickpockets in your country? Write about pickpocketing in Korea.

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The pickpockets no in the my country don't get pickpockets if leave the phone but my country have many bicycle thieves.

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The pickpockets no in the my country don't get pickpockets if leave the phone but my country have many bicycle thieves.
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