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I am a perfectionism and workaholic. For example, yesterday, He (my team member) was so late at his leading events. I was upset but I delivered the massage softly from Slack. It is so small something but I feel big something of their attitude when they work. So these days I think how they can grow and focus on work.

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Hello, Ella!

I agree that you are a perfectionist and workaholic. You never stop until everything is well-made and excellent. You wake up early to achieve your goals.

If you see others around you not doing the same, it could really be disappointing. Thus, demonstrating your great work and hoping that they will do the same is one of the ways to influence them to do better.

As you can see below, some words were underlined and they show other forms from your sentence. Make sure that the syntax (word arrangements) are in place.  In addition, always use correct prepositions and idioms. Read and study them carefully. Great job!

See you.

-T. Donna~

I am a perfectionism and workaholic. For example, yesterday, He (my team member) was so late at his leading events. I was upset but I delivered the massage softly from Slack. It is so small something but I feel big something of their attitude when they work. So these days I think how they can grow and focus on work.
>>  I am a perfectionist and a workaholic. For example, yesterday, my team member was so late in leading events. I was upset but I delivered the massage softly from Slack. It is so small but I feel big something about their attitude when they work. So these days, I think of ways on how they can grow and focus on work.
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