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Do doctors have a duty to serve the country before their personal or financial interests?

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2025-05-17 458

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As a licensed professional, all medical professionals have an obligation to service the public. Like the case of pandemic diseases like Covid-19, they might be forced to make sacrifices that override their personal and financial gain. However, I do not believe that doctors have a duty to sacrifice their personal interest because of the public goods every time. But it is under one condition of not abusing their power because doctors’ can yield influence on patient life and death. An example of power abuse recently happened in Korea. Under the name of the block government’s attempt to increase student admission quota of medical school, many doctors participated in the protest. This collective action led to the shortage of staff and timely treatment. Some hospitals forced non-urgent, less complicated patients to no longer be treated at care facilities and resulted in once in a lifetime health crisis. Accordingly, doctors can seek profits, but it is also crucial to strike a balance.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thank you for this Alice!

As a licensed professional, all medical professionals have an obligation to service the public. 
>>> As licensed professionals, all medical professionals have an obligation to serve the public.  
Like the case of pandemic diseases like Covid-19, they might be forced to make sacrifices that override their personal and financial gain. 
>>> Like in case of pandemic diseases like Covid-19, they might be forced to make sacrifices that override their personal and financial gain.
>>> OR:  Like in case of pandemic diseases like Covid-19, they might be forced to make sacrifices that may compromise their personal and financial gain.  
However, I do not believe that doctors have a duty to sacrifice their personal interest because of the public goods every time. 
>>>  OR: However, I do not believe that doctors have a duty to sacrifice their personal interest for the good of the public every time. 
But it is under one condition of not abusing their power because doctors’ can yield influence on patient life and death. An example of power abuse recently happened in Korea.     
>>> OR: As long as it is not abusing their power because doctors’ can yield influence on patient's life and death, an example of power abuse that recently happened in Korea.  
Under the name of the block government’s attempt to increase student admission quota of medical school, many doctors participated in the protest. 
>>> OR: To go against the government’s attempt to increase student admission quota of medical school, many doctors participated in the protest. 
This collective action led to the shortage of staff and timely treatment. 
>>>  correct
Some hospitals forced non-urgent, less complicated patients to no longer be treated at care facilities and resulted in once in a lifetime health crisis. 
>>> correct  
>>> OR: Some hospitals forced non-urgent, less complicated patients to no longer be treated at care facilities and it resulted in a once in a lifetime health crisis. 
Accordingly, doctors can seek profits, but it is also crucial to strike a balance.
>>>  correct
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