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What qualities make someone a good pet owner?

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2025-05-19 587

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What qualities make someone a good pet owner?

In my thought,
It isn't different from treating human.
Above all, we must be loving heart each other,
but we don't have to restrict and force the others because of love.
It is not love. If someone plans to adopt a dog.
I want to say that you have to respect and
considerate your dog as one of family.


Hello Elly.
I had a moment rest time in my company .
So, I wrote dawn my story about the title.
I'm happy now, because I can meet my dog after a hour.
I always thank you for your help.
See you in tomorrow class.
Bye.

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Hi Stella,
Thank you for taking the time to answer this. I'm glad to hear that you were able to get some rest, you deserve it. 
Listening to your stories about Neaty makes me happy too! You're always welcome. I'll see you later. :)
- Teacher Elly~


In my thought, It isn't different from treating human.
>> In my thought, it isn't different from treating a human.
OR >> In my opinion, it's no different from treating a human. 

Above all, we must be loving heart each other, but we don't have to restrict and force the others because of love.
>> Above all, we must be loving to each other, but we don't have to restrict and force the others because of love.
OR >> Above all, we must love one another, but we shouldn't restrict or force others in the name of love.

It is not love. If someone plans to adopt a dog.
>>It is not love if someone adopts a dog without a plan in mind.
OR >> It's not love if someone only plans to adopt a dog for selfish reasons.

I want to say that you have to respect and considerate your dog as one of family.
>> I want to say that you have to respect and be considerate of your dog as a member of the family.
OR >> I want to say that you have to respect and consider your dog as one of the family.

Hello Elly.
>> CORRECT

I had a moment rest time in my company .
OR >> I had a moment of rest time in my company.
>> I had a moment of rest at my company.

So, I wrote dawn my story about the title.
>> So, I wrote down my story about the title.
OR >> So, I wrote down my story based on the title.

I'm happy now, because I can meet my dog after a hour.
>> I'm happy now because I can meet my dog after an hour.
OR >> I'm happy now because I can see my dog in an hour.

I always thank you for your help.
>> CORRECT
OR >> I'm always thankful for your help.

See you in tomorrow class. Bye.
>> See you in tomorrow's class. Bye.
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