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If you can become a Disney character, which one are you going to be and why?

작성자: 이*윤
2025-05-19 16

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I love all of Disney's characters, but the characters I love and the characters I want to be are different. For example, I love Zootopia's Nick and Judy but I don't want to be.
The characters I want to be are Cinderella and Alddin's princess Jasmine and Moana.
Cinderella is my first love character. Because when I was young, I wanted to be a Cinderella and it was my wish to meet a wonderful prince who was destined like Chinderella.
But as I grew older, I wanted to be Princess Jasmine or Moana. Along with Mulan, Princess Jasmine is Disney's princess of color, and she liked how she pioneered her life and looked confident. The favorability became more affectionate when it was released as a movie 2019 and speechless became my favorite song.
In addition, Moana is a princess of color who follows Princess Jasmine, a special character that also includes a tribal culture, and I liked the spirit of moving toward and challenging my dreams like Princess Jasmine, and I also want to be brave.

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Hi! 

Thank you for submitting your answer. It was nice to know about your favorite characters and who you want to become. The changes also show how you became more mature over time. I really love these brave and independent Disney princesses. They're awesome. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



I love all of Disney's characters, but the characters I love and the characters I want to be are different.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The Disney characters I love aren't necessarily the ones I want to be.
 
For example, I love Zootopia's Nick and Judy but I don't want to be.
>> For example, I love Nick and Judy from Zootopia, but I don’t want to be them.

The characters I want to be are Cinderella and Alddin's princess Jasmine and Moana.
>> The characters I want to be are Cinderella, Princess Jasmine from Aladdin, and Moana.

Cinderella is my first love character.
>> Cinderella was the first character I fell in love with.

Because when I was young, I wanted to be a Cinderella and it was my wish to meet a wonderful prince who was destined like Chinderella.
>> When I was young, I wanted to be like Cinderella, and I wished to meet a wonderful prince who was meant for me just like her.

But as I grew older, I wanted to be Princess Jasmine or Moana. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Later on, I found myself wanting to be like Jasmine or Moana.

Along with Mulan, Princess Jasmine is Disney's princess of color, and she liked how she pioneered her life and looked confident. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: "Princess Jasmine, like Mulan, is a Disney princess of color, and I admired her confidence and independence.

The favorability became more affectionate when it was released as a movie 2019 and speechless became my favorite song.
>> My affection for her grew even more when the live-action movie was released in 2019, and 'Speechless' became my favorite song

In addition, Moana is a princess of color who follows Princess Jasmine, a special character that also includes a tribal culture, and I liked the spirit of moving toward and challenging my dreams like Princess Jasmine, and I also want to be brave.
>> In addition, Moana is another princess of color who came after Jasmine. She’s a unique character who represents tribal culture. I liked her spirit of going after her dreams, just like Jasmine, and I also want to be brave like her.
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