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I think family is the relationship which is like part of myself.
I should endure them when they make me burden.
But there might be the situation some happening can break my belief.
I have to choice my life between family or alone.
Friend is important too.
They don't hurt me a lot better than family.
They can agree with me and we can share emotion each other.
But family is seriously important to me.

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Hi, Ms. Sunny!
Blood is thicker than water, and  a  friend is a loving one at all times, as stated in Proverbs 17:17. The proverb highlights the unwavering nature of a true friend, someone who provides support and love not only during pleasant times but also through difficult situations. This contrasts with a brother/sister, who is said to be born for a time of adversity, suggesting that while a brother/sister may be a source of support during tough times, a friend's love is constant
Great day ahead!
Aki~

I think family is the relationship which is like part of myself.
>>> I believe family is a relationship that feels like a part of me.
 
I should endure them when they make me burden.
>>> I should endure them when they give me a burden.
 
But there might be the situation some happening can break my belief.
>>> But there might be situations where something happening can break my belief.

I have to choice my life between family or alone.
>>> I have to choose between family and being alone.

Friend is important too.
>>> Friends are important too.

They don't hurt me a lot better than family.
>>> They don't hurt me as much as family.

They can agree with me and we can share emotion each other.
>>> They can agree with me, and we can share emotions.

But family is seriously important to me.
>> CORRECT!

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