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What does the rise of sologamy say about changing roles for women in South Korea?

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2025-05-21 355

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Based on the Confucianism ideology, the women’s role was limited to be confined to be home as housewives and good mother. Many women got married in mid 20s and had babies before 30s. Since it is the mandatory for men to serve the military, the duties of women were to have a child and maintain harmony in the household by avoiding any unnecessary conflict. However, the rise of sologamy broke this social norm. According to the recent news articles, 1 in 3 South Koreans lives alone and more than half a woman. South Korean women are among the most highly educated in the world. Most women graduated from universities, and many engage in wide variety of field. This trend made many women to be more financially stable which led to opt out from marriage market because there is concern of career discontinuity after getting married and having babies. Accordingly the rise in sologamy in South Korea indicate the more active role of women in society.

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Thank you for this Aciel!

Based on the Confucianism ideology, the women’s role was limited to be confined to be home as housewives and good mother. 
>>> Based on the Confucian ideology, women’s role was limited to being confined at home as housewives and good mothers. 
Many women got married in mid 20s and had babies before 30s. 
>>> Many women got married in their mid-20s and had babies before 30s. 
Since it is the mandatory for men to serve the military, the duties of women were to have a child and maintain harmony in the household by avoiding any unnecessary conflict. 
>>> Since it is mandatory for men to serve in the military, the duties of women were to have a child and maintain harmony in the household by avoiding any unnecessary conflict. 
However, the rise of sologamy broke this social norm. 
>>> correct
According to the recent news articles, 1 in 3 South Koreans lives alone and more than half a woman. 
>>> According to the recent news articles, 1 in 3 South Koreans live alone and more than half are women.  
South Korean women are among the most highly educated in the world. 
>>>  correct
Most women graduated from universities, and many engage in wide variety of fields. 
>>>  correct
This trend made many women to be more financially stable which led to opt out from marriage market because there is concern of career discontinuity after getting married and having babies.
>>> This trend made many women to be more financially stable which led to opting out from the marriage market because there is a concern of career discontinuity after getting married and having babies.
 Accordingly, the rise in sologamy in South Korea indicate the more active role of women in society.
>>> correct
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