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What is the most popular amusement park in your country, and why do you think it became the most pop

작성자: 이*윤
2025-05-21 904

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The most popular amusement parks in Korea are Everland and LotteWorld.
The two amusement parks are very large amusement parks owned by large and famous companies. Therefore, there are very big and wide, so there are many fun rides and it can accommodate many people.
Both amusement parks have characters that symbolize the amusement parks and are gaining popularity. Also, there are many family visitors, so it holds events or festivals aimed at them so that many people visit.
But, the two amusement parks have conflicting characteristics.
Everland is outdoors, LotteWorld is both indoors and outdoors.
Also, Everland has a zoo, but LotteWorld doesn't have. Otherwise, LotteWorld is connected to Lotte Tower and Aquarium, so people can visit it by course.
The festival is also different, Everland is famous for water gun fights in the summer, and LotteWorld is famous for family festivals.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi! 

Thank you for sharing your answer with me. 
It was nice to know about Everland and Lotte World. 
You did well in describing them and giving your thoughts and observations. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



The most popular amusement parks in Korea are Everland and LotteWorld.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Two of the most popular amusement parks in Korea are Everland and Lotte World.

The two amusement parks are very large amusement parks owned by large and famous companies.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: The two amusement parks are large and owned by well-known companies.
>> Or: These amusement parks are owned by major companies and are quite large

Therefore, there are very big and wide, so there are many fun rides and it can accommodate many people.
>> Therefore, they are spacious and offer many fun rides, making them capable of accommodating large crowds.

Both amusement parks have characters that symbolize the amusement parks and are gaining popularity. 
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Both amusement parks have mascots that represent them and are becoming increasingly popular.

Also, there are many family visitors, so it holds events or festivals aimed at them so that many people visit.
>> Many families visit, so both parks hold events and festivals targeting them to attract more visitors.

But, the two amusement parks have conflicting characteristics.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: However, the two amusement parks have different characteristics.

Everland is outdoors, LotteWorld is both indoors and outdoors.
>> Everland is an outdoor park, while Lotte World offers both indoor and outdoor experiences.
>> Or: Everland is entirely outdoors, whereas Lotte World combines indoor and outdoor areas.

Also, Everland has a zoo, but LotteWorld doesn't have. Otherwise, LotteWorld is connected to Lotte Tower and Aquarium, so people can visit it by course.
>> Everland has a zoo, while Lotte World does not. However, Lotte World is connected to Lotte Tower and the Aquarium, allowing visitors to explore them together.

The festival is also different, Everland is famous for water gun fights in the summer, and LotteWorld is famous for family festivals.
>> The festivals are also different. Everland is known for its summer water gun fight events, while Lotte World is popular for its family-oriented festivals.
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