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Q : Why do you think so many people are afraid of insects?

A : In my opinion, it can be affected by genes.
One day, i saw the youtube about why people feel afraid.
The science youtuber said that people who can`t feel afraid died and people who can feel afraid survived.
Since our genes come from survived people, we feel afraid when it is dangerous situation.
That is why many people feel afraid about insects.

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Hello Eddy
Thank you for your great effort! Your explanation was very interesting and clear. Just a quick tip: be careful with word forms (like ¡°feel fear¡± instead of ¡°feel afraid¡±) and articles (¡°a dangerous situation¡±). Keep practicing—you¡¯re improving a lot!
~Teacher Kate

In my opinion, it can be affected by genes.
>>In my opinion, it can be influenced by genes.
One day, i saw the youtube about why people feel afraid.
>>One day, I watched a YouTube video about why people feel afraid.
The science youtuber said that people who can`t feel afraid died and people who can feel afraid survived.
>>The science YouTuber said that people who couldn¡¯t feel fear died, and those who could feel fear survived.
Since our genes come from survived people, we feel afraid when it is dangerous situation.
>>Since our genes come from people who survived, we feel afraid in dangerous situations.
That is why many people feel afraid about insects.
>>That is why many people are afraid of insects.

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