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Can you talk about a book that you recently read? What was it about and what did you learn from it?

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I recently read a book named of Siddhartha, written by Hermann Hesse. I have been interested in classical novels and my close friend recommended this book for me, so I chose this book to read. It is a story about the man who went a spiritual journey to find truth. He was born in noble house but he realized that he couldn't find a true peace there, and abandoned his given life and home. After that, he experienced many emotional states from various experiences from his journey. and he eventually learnt that the self-development is not in one way, but we could pursue our own life from experiences, love and a deep sense of empathy. The best part of this book is that difficult and profound messages flow naturally in expressions of the sentences. To be honest, I couldn't understand all the meanings of this book since it is quite hard to read. However, the book led me to rethink about my life and how I want to leave.

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Hi Isaac!
Great start to a new week!
Please take note of the use of articles and prepositions.
This can be improved through constant practice and reading.
Make sure to keep your sentences simple to avoid mistakes.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I recently read a book named of Siddhartha, written by Hermann Hesse. 
>> I recently read a book entitled "Siddhartha", written by Hermann Hesse. 
I have been interested in classical novels and my close friend recommended this book for me, so I chose this book to read. 
>> Correct
It is a story about the man who went a spiritual journey to find truth. 
>> It is a story about a man who went a on spiritual journey to find truth. 
He was born in noble house but he realized that he couldn't find a true peace there, and abandoned his given life and home. 
>> He was born into a noble house but he realized that he couldn't find true peace there, and abandoned his life and home. 
After that, he experienced many emotional states from various experiences from his journey. 
>> After that, he experienced many emotions from various experiences on his journey. 
and he eventually learnt that the self-development is not in one way, but we could pursue our own life from experiences, love and a deep sense of empathy. 
>> He eventually learned that self-development is not achieved in just one way, but that we can pursue our own path through experiences, love, and a deep sense of empathy.
The best part of this book is that difficult and profound messages flow naturally in expressions of the sentences. 
>> The best part of this book is the difficult and profound messages that flow naturally in the expressions used.
To be honest, I couldn't understand all the meanings of this book since it is quite hard to read. 
>> To be honest, I couldn't understand all the meanings behind the book since it is quite hard to read. 
However, the book led me to rethink about my life and how I want to leave.
>> However, the book led me to rethink about my life and how I want to live. 
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