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What do you think the world will look like if we don¡¯t act on global warming?

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What do you think the world will look like if we don¡¯t act on global warming?


If we don't act anything on global warming, I think finally all human will be disappeared in the future.
When I watched a national documentary, It was warning about global warming.
If the earth temperature would rise 1degree up, the ocean should be going up 55cm.
As a result, human will get many diseases, according to some articles.
So, we must save and protect our earth for our next generations,
because we are living in descendant's earth for rent, like saying someone .

Hello, Elly.
How was your day, today?
I had a busy day , a bit.
We will meet in our class today's evening.
See you in the class.
Bye.

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Hi Stella, 
Thank you for taking the time to answer this essay. :)
I totally agree with you. We must protect the Earth for future generations to come.
My day is good. Thank you for asking. :)
I hope today¡¯s workload didn¡¯t tire you out too much. See you later! :)

- Teacher Elly~



If we don't act anything on global warming, I think finally all human will be disappeared in the future.
>> If we don't take any action on global warming, I think eventually all humans will disappear in the future.
OR >> If we don't take action regarding global warming, I believe that eventually all humans will become extinct.

When I watched a national documentary, It was warning about global warming.
>> When I watched a national documentary, it was warning about global warming.
OR >> When I watched a national documentary, it warned about the dangers of global warming.

If the earth temperature would rise 1degree up, the ocean should be going up 55cm.
>> 
If the Earth's temperature rises by 1 degree, the ocean level could rise by 55 cm.

As a result, human will get many diseases, according to some articles.
>> 
As a result, humans will get many diseases, according to some articles.
OR >> As a result, people may develop many diseases, according to some articles.

So, we must save and protect our earth for our next generations, because we are living in descendant's earth for rent, like saying someone. 
>> So, we must save and protect our Earth for future generations, because we are living on our descendants¡¯ Earth as if we¡¯re renting it, as someone once said.
OR >> So, we must protect our Earth for future generations, because we¡¯re only renting it from our descendants, as someone once said.

Hello, Elly.
>> CORRECT

How was your day, today?
>> 
How was your day today?

I had a busy day , a bit.
>> 
I had a bit of a busy day.

We will meet in our class today's evening.
>>
We will meet in our class this evening.

See you in the class. Bye.
>> CORRECT
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