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How does the weather affect your daily activities? Explain.

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Weather always has affected my daily activities closely. Actually, I don't prefer any special weather, I just try to enjoy sunny days, rainy days, and so on as they are, because each weather has its own merit to love. Nevertheless, it is true that some weather conditions can limit me from doing outdoor activities. One of the most direct examples is that I couldn't take a walk whenever it rains. Walking or biking for a while at the end of the day helps me relax and reflect. Because of that, when I was young, I felt depressed a bit as I couldn't go out. But as matured mentally, now I can control my emotional conditions more effectively. For example, In rainy days when I can't go out, I usually listen to music or read books indoors for healing. Also, there are other positive aspects that I can regard. Although I can't see sunny light, rainy sounds makes me comfortable and being calm down. I think it is really helpful for me to think positively depending on diverse weathers.

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Hi Isaac!
Your efforts always shine through your work.
Take note of the correct vocabulary words to use in your sentences.
The same goes for prepositions.
Let's talk about these more in class.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Weather always has affected my daily activities closely. 
>> Weather has always affected my daily activities closely. 
Actually, I don't prefer any special weather, I just try to enjoy sunny days, rainy days, and so on as they are, because each weather has its own merit to love. 
>> Actually, I don't prefer any special type of weather because I just try to enjoy sunny days, rainy days, and so on as they are, because each weather has its own merits to love.
Nevertheless, it is true that some weather conditions can limit me from doing outdoor activities. 
>> Correct
One of the most direct examples is that I couldn't take a walk whenever it rains. 
>> One of the most direct examples is that I can't take a walk whenever it rains. 
Walking or biking for a while at the end of the day helps me relax and reflect
>> Correct
Because of that, when I was young, I felt depressed a bit as I couldn't go out. 
>> Because of that, when I was young, I used to feel a bit depressed when I couldn’t go out.
But as matured mentally, now I can control my emotional conditions more effectively. 
>> But as I matured mentally, I’ve learned to control my emotions more effectively.
For example, In rainy days when I can't go out, I usually listen to music or read books indoors for healing. 
>> For example, on rainy days when I can’t go outside, I usually listen to music or read books indoors to heal and relax.
Also, there are other positive aspects that I can regard. 
>> Also, there are other positive aspects of rainy weather that I can appreciate.
Although I can't see sunny light, rainy sounds makes me comfortable and being calm down. 
>> Although I can’t see the sunlight, the sound of the rain makes me feel comfortable and calm.
I think it is really helpful for me to think positively depending on diverse weathers.
>> I think it is really helpful for me to think positively no matter what the weather is.


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