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In 3~5 sentences, answer the question below:
>> What are your thoughts on the possibility of a WWIII?

I think WW3 may break out when several requirements met
first, America have to join the war because if the war break out without america, america can hold back WW3.
second, Countries which have Nuclear bomb have to keep agreement about that they will not use Nuclear bomb with any situation came out because when the losing country have Nuclear bomb, they can boom it and then the won countries are also suffered damage.

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                                    What are your thoughts on the possibility of a WWIII?



I think WW3 may break out when several requirements met
first, America have to join the war because if the war break out without america, america can hold back WW3.
>>> I think World War III may break out when several conditions are met. First, America must join the war because if it breaks out without American involvement, the U.S. may be able to prevent it from escalating into a global conflict.

second, Countries which have Nuclear bomb have to keep agreement about that they will not use Nuclear bomb with any situation came out because when the losing country have Nuclear bomb, they can boom it and then the won countries are also suffered damage.
>>> Second, countries that possess nuclear weapons must uphold agreements stating that they will not use them under any circumstances. If a losing country has nuclear weapons, it may detonate them, causing destruction that also affects the victorious nations.

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