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I used to be afraid of stepping out of my familiar life.
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Hello, Ms. Judy! Your story has a hopeful tone too, focusing on growth and building confidence, which makes it motivating. It reminds me that stepping out of comfort zones is often where real progress happens.
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I used to be afraid of stepping out of my familiar life.
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My goal in life is to keep growing by embracing change and making a better future.
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