¹«·á ·¹º§Å×½ºÆ® ¹Þ°í °­»çÆò°¡ ³²±â¸é 1,OOO¿ø ÄíÆù Áï½Ã Àû¸³!

Ȥ½Ã »çÀÌÆ®¿¡¼± ãÁö ¸øÇÑ ±Ã±ÝÇÑ Á¡ÀÌ ÀÖÀ¸¼¼¿ä?
³²°ÜÁֽŠÀ̸ÞÀÏÀ» ÅëÇØ ´äº¯ µå¸®°Ú½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®ÀÇÇϽг»¿ëÀÌ ¹®ÀÚ·Î ¹ß¼ÛµÇ¿À´Ï
¿¬¶ôó¸¦ ³²°ÜÁÖ¼¼¿ä.
¾÷¹«½Ã°£ ¿ù~±Ý ¿ÀÀü9½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ6½Ã
(Á¡½É½Ã°£ ³·12½Ã~¿ÀÈÄ1½Ã)

¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇ

¿µ¾î ¸»Çϱâ¿Í ¾²±â¸¦ µ¿½Ã¿¡ Àâ´Â´Ù!

ÀڽŠÀÖ°Ô ¾µ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ¿µÀÛ¹®À» À§ÇØ ÆÄ¿öÀ×±Û¸®½¬ ¼ö¾÷À» ¼ö°­ÇϽôÂ
ȸ¿ø´Ôµé²² ¹«·á·Î Á¦°øÇص帮´Â ºÎ°¡ ¼­ºñ½º·Î, Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ ÀÚÀ¯ ÁÖÁ¦
¶Ç´Â °­»ç´ÔÀÌ ³»Áֽô °úÁ¦¸¦ ȸ¿ø´Ô²²¼­ ¿µ¾î·Î ÀÛ¼ºÇØÁֽøé,
´ã´ç °­»ç ´Ô²²¼­ ¡®¹®¹ý ¿À·ù ±³Á¤¡¯ °ú ¡®´õ ³ªÀº ¿µ¾î½Ä Ç¥Çö¡¯À¸·Î ±³Á¤ÇØÁÖ´Â
¼­ºñ½º ÀÔ´Ï´Ù.

>> What are your thoughts on the drinking culture in Korean workplaces?

ÀÛ¼ºÀÚ: ±è*ÀÏ
2025-05-29 767

ȸ¿ø´ÔÀÇ ¿µÀÛ¹®

>> What are your thoughts on the drinking culture in Korean workplaces?

As previous generation, they forced to enjoy alcohol in workplaces. But thesedays according to article, soju sales volume are decreasing from decade. And dining together frequency is also decreasing. I guess this phenomenom occurs the reason why young officers experience stiff office culture and drinking culture after time they grow up as dining together hater.

°­»ç´ÔÀÇ Ã·»è±³Á¤ ³»¿ë

Here's your corrected essay, David.  Please go over the revisions given below.  Have a good night's sleep!  


Cheers,
Jean~~



                              

                                          Are there any political hot potatoes in your country?


Our country's hot potatoes are about new elected president lee.
>>> Our country's hot potatoes are about the newly elected President Lee.

One of them I know about new president's office moved. 
>>> One thing I know is that the new president's office has moved.

Previous president yun used Yongsan office but new president lee wants to come back to The blue house because he think Yongsan office doesn't suitable for administraition of state affairs.
>>> The previous president, Yoon, used the Yongsan office, but the new president, Lee, wants to move back to the Blue House because he thinks the Yongsan office is not suitable for the administration of state affairs.
¹øÈ£ Á¦¸ñ ±Û¾´ÀÌ °ø°³ »óÅ µî·ÏÀÏ Á¶È¸¼ö
142711 2/24 Homework ±Ç*ºó ¿Ï·á 2025-02-25 1
142710 2025.02.25 homework! ÀÌ*ÁØ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-25 1249
142709 Homework ±è*´Ô ¿Ï·á 2025-02-25 1149
142708 script Á¶*Èñ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-25 1082
142707 Homework ¿À*º½ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-25 1
142706 homework ±è*¿¬ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 2
142705 Technology and culture2 ¾î*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1
142704 What makes a restaurant standout for you? ÀÌ*À± ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1210
142703 24.Feb.2025 ±è*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 0
142702 Do you think it\'s important for kids to choose early what they... ½Å*±Ô ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1203
142701 What are your main ambitions in life? ±è*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1144
142700 ¡®If the mirror is broken today, it is unlucky day.¡¯ À¯*ºó ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1017
142699 fall in love ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1
142698 proper outfit ¹Î*Á¤ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 0
142697 homework ±è*¿ì ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1
142696 Technology and culture ¾î*ÁÖ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 2
142695 Should schools teach controversial cultural issues? (Ex: Some... ¹®*Çö ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1344
142694 Homework ÀÌ*¹Î ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1175
142693 The homework for 24th February. Á¶*È£ ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1280
142692 Describe a typical bedroom of a Korean student your age. Â÷*Áø ¿Ï·á 2025-02-24 1200

HOW TO USE IT?

[¸¶ÀÌÆäÀÌÁö > ¼ö¾÷ ³»¿ë º¸±â > ÇнÀ ͏°´õ > ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ ¹öư Ŭ¸¯]

¼ö¾÷ Ƚ¼ö¸¸Å­ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀÌ »ý¼ºµÇ¸ç,
Áö³­ ³¯Â¥¿¡µµ °Ô½Ã ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

ÁÖ5ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 20ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ3ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 12ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
ÁÖ2ȸ ¼ö¾÷ : ¿ù 08ȸ ÀÌ¿ë °¡´É
01
±³Á¤ ³»¿ëÀº ÃÖ´ë 1,000byte±îÁö ¿Ã¸± ¼ö ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.

÷ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ¿øÈ°ÇÑ Ã·»èÀ» À§ÇÑ Âü°íÀÚ·á·Î »ç¿ëµÉ »Ó,
ÆÄÀÏ¿¡ ´ëÇÑ Ã·»èÀº ºÒ°¡´É ÇÕ´Ï´Ù.

¾÷·Îµå °¡´ÉÇÑ Ã·ºÎ ÆÄÀÏÀº ÃÖ´ë 2mb±îÁöÀ̸ç,
÷ºÎ ÇÒ ¼ö ÀÖ´Â ÆÄÀÏ Çü½ÄÀº ´ÙÀ½°ú °°½À´Ï´Ù.

¹®¼­ - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
À̹ÌÁö - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
Àü¹® ºÐ¾ß¸¦ Á¦¿ÜÇÑ È¸¿ø´ÔÀÌ Á÷Á¢ ÀÛ¼ºÇÑ ±Û¸¸
÷»èÀÌ °¡´ÉÇϸç,

¿Ã·ÁÁֽбÛÀÇ °­»ç´Ô ÷»èÀº 24½Ã°£ À̳»¿¡
¿Ï·á µÇ´Â °ÍÀ» ¿øÄ¢À¸·Î Çϰí ÀÖ½À´Ï´Ù.
03
ÇÏ·ç °Ô½Ã °¡´ÉÇÑ ±ÛÀº 3ȸ±îÁö À̸ç,
Á¾·áµÈ ¼ö¾÷ÀÇ ¿µÀÛ±³Á¤ °Ô½ÃÆÇÀº
ÀÌ¿ëÀÌ ¾î·Á¿î Á¡ ¾çÇØ ºÎŹ µå¸³´Ï´Ù.
04