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As previous generation, they forced to enjoy alcohol in workplaces. But thesedays according to article, soju sales volume are decreasing from decade. And dining together frequency is also decreasing. I guess this phenomenom occurs the reason why young officers experience stiff office culture and drinking culture after time they grow up as dining together hater.

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