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>> What are your thoughts on the drinking culture in Korean workplaces?

As previous generation, they forced to enjoy alcohol in workplaces. But thesedays according to article, soju sales volume are decreasing from decade. And dining together frequency is also decreasing. I guess this phenomenom occurs the reason why young officers experience stiff office culture and drinking culture after time they grow up as dining together hater.

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