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Do you like attending festivals? Have you ever participated in a traditional festival? Explain.

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I love attending various festivals because they inspire me and make my life feel full. Last year, I participated in a music festival held at my university. Many musicians came to perform and I could watch their performances very closely. Although I don't like loud atmospheres, it was a really unforgettable experience. Korean universities have a unique festival culture. Each college of the school holds a distinctive festival that represents their identity. I also attended Daejeon Midnight Festival held every August. It is a traditional local festival and provides many attractive things to see. If you take part in this festival, you can enjoy K-pop concerts, retro comedy shows and street parades. There are also charming night markets providing delicious foods. The main concept of the festival is time travel, showing the passage of 'the past, now, and the future of Daejeon'. It's free and people of all ages can enjoy. I hope you can visit someday in the summer.

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Hi Isaac!
Good job in getting your point across.
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I love attending various festivals because they inspire me and make my life feel full. 
>> Correct
Last year, I participated in a music festival held at my university. 
>> Correct
Many musicians came to perform and I could watch their performances very closely. 
>> Correct
Although I don't like loud atmospheres, it was a really unforgettable experience. 
>> Correct
Korean universities have a unique festival culture. 
>> Correct
Each college of the school holds a distinctive festival that represents their identity. 
>> Each college of the school holds a distinctive festival that represents its identity. 
I also attended Daejeon Midnight Festival held every August. 
>> I also attend Daejeon Midnight Festival held every August. 
It is a traditional local festival and provides many attractive things to see. 
>> It is a traditional local festival and it provides many opportunities for people to see something attractive.
If you take part in this festival, you can enjoy K-pop concerts, retro comedy shows and street parades. 
>> Correct
There are also charming night markets providing delicious foods. 
>> There are also charming night markets offering delicious foods. 
The main concept of the festival is time travel, showing the passage of 'the past, now, and the future of Daejeon'. 
>> The main concept of the festival is time travel, showing the flow of 'the past, the present, and the future of Daejeon'. 
It's free and people of all ages can enjoy. 
>> Correct
I hope you can visit someday in the summer.
>> Correct
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