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Do you prefer small gatherings or big celebrations? Why?

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I think that there are pros and cons to different types of gatherings. However, I prefer small gatherings because I feel comfortable when participating in them. They allow people to build closer and more sincere relationships. I feel satisfied when I can devote my energy to genuine people and support them. In contrast, I often feel exhausted after attending big celebrations. They lead to wide but superficial relationships. I love deep conversations and calm atmospheres. Nevertheless, big celebrations sometimes offer me vigor and inspiration and encourage me to improve my social skills. In addition, interacting with a wide range of people helps me become more mature and open-minded. I have dreamed of working in international and diverse environments, so it would be really helpful for me to learn how to deal with diverse people from big celebrations. That's why I am trying to appropriately adjust the frequency of participation in both types of gatherings nowadays.

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I think that there are pros and cons to different types of gatherings. 
>> Correct
However, I prefer small gatherings because I feel comfortable when participating in them. 
>> Correct
They allow people to build closer and more sincere relationships. 
>> Correct
I feel satisfied when I can devote my energy to genuine people and support them. 
>> Correct
In contrast, I often feel exhausted after attending big celebrations. 
>> Correct
They lead to wide but superficial relationships.
>> They lead to numerous but superficial relationships.
I love deep conversations and calm atmospheres. 
>> Correct
Nevertheless, big celebrations sometimes offer me vigor and inspiration and encourage me to improve my social skills. 
>> Correct
In addition, interacting with a wide range of people helps me become more mature and open-minded. 
>> Correct
I have dreamed of working in international and diverse environments, so it would be really helpful for me to learn how to deal with diverse people from big celebrations. 
>> I have dreamed of working in international and diverse environments, so it would be really helpful for me to learn how to deal with diverse people through big celebrations. 
That's why I am trying to appropriately adjust the frequency of participation in both types of gatherings nowadays.
>> Correct
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