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What is your favorite summer activity? Why?

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My favorite summer activities are swimming or playing in the water.
Summer is hot, so it's good to do activities that cool down or less sweaty, but it's hard to find. Then, I learned about water-related activities, and as I tried it, I became interested in it, so I kept doing it. Also, I always like water. So, the exercise I did continuously was swimming, and the place where I went to hang out with my friends every summer was a water park.
Therefore, I can say my favorite summer activity is that related to water.

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Hi! 

Thank you for sending your answer to me. 
I really appreciate it. Summer is coming soon, so I hope that you'll get to enjoy and learn more water-related activities. ^^ 

~ Teacher Gina



My favorite summer activities are swimming or playing in the water.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I enjoy swimming or playing in the water most.

Summer is hot, so it's good to do activities that cool down or less sweaty, but it's hard to find.
>> It is hot in summer so it's good to do activities that can cool us down or make us less sweaty, but it's hard to find them. 

Then, I learned about water-related activities, and as I tried it, I became interested in it, so I kept doing it. 
>> Then, I learned about water-related activities, and as I tried it, I became interested in it, so I kept doing them.
>> Or: Then, I became interested with water-related activities as I learned and tried them so I kept going.

Also, I always like water. 
>> CORRECT.

So, the exercise I did continuously was swimming, and the place where I went to hang out with my friends every summer was a water park.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: So I continuously did swimming and visited a waterpark every summer when I went out with my friends. 

Therefore, I can say my favorite summer activity is that related to water.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Therefore, I can really say that I like water-related  activities most during summer. 

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