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How do you treat yourself to make yourself feel better when the weather is bad? Explain.

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I love bright and cozy weather with mild temperatures and fresh air. It is essential for me to get some sunshine every day even if it is just for a while. This makes my mind more positive and mentally active. However, I sometimes encounter bad weather and it influences my daily mood and thoughts. When I was a teenager, not emotionally grounded, I was easily affected by gloomy weather. For example, the rainy season in summer or persistent cloudy days in winter made me feel depressed. I wished I could control my feelings and learn how to effectively cope with bad moods. I started to broaden my hobbies and activities such as playing instruments, exploring new genres of books or movies, trying leisure activities I had never done before. These efforts really helped me stay mentally stable not only during bad weather but also slump time. It is still the same these days. For one example, I sometimes enjoy looking at small ornaments like a candle to comfort myself on rainy days.

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I love bright and cozy weather with mild temperatures and fresh air. 
>> Correct
It is essential for me to get some sunshine every day even if it is just for a while. 
>> Correct
This makes my mind more positive and mentally active. 
>> Correct
However, I sometimes encounter bad weather and it influences my daily mood and thoughts. 
>> Correct
When I was a teenager, not emotionally grounded, I was easily affected by gloomy weather. 
>> When I was a teenager and not emotionally grounded, I was easily affected by gloomy weather.
For example, the rainy season in summer or persistent cloudy days in winter made me feel depressed. 
>> Correct
I wished I could control my feelings and learn how to effectively cope with bad moods. 
>> I wished I could have controlled my feelings and learned how to cope effectively with bad moods.
I started to broaden my hobbies and activities such as playing instruments, exploring new genres of books or movies, trying leisure activities I had never done before. 
>> I started to broaden my hobbies and activities such as playing instruments, exploring new genres of books or movies and trying leisure activities I had never done before. 
These efforts really helped me stay mentally stable not only during bad weather but also slump time. 
>> These efforts really helped me stay mentally stable not only during bad weather but also during those times I felt that I was in a slump. 
It is still the same these days. 
>> Correct
For one example, I sometimes enjoy looking at small ornaments like a candle to comfort myself on rainy days.
>> For example, I sometimes enjoy looking at small ornaments like a candle to comfort myself on rainy days.
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