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I dislike people who shift work onto others. Some people obviously don't want to do any work. Everyone don't really want to do work but they need to do that, so they just stand it. And I don't like criticism without solution. I think repeated refusal annoy everyone. We need to share our idea freely and get a feedback.

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Hi, Megan^^
Thank you for sharing.
I agree. Sometimes we do things because we need to. 
_T. SHAY^^
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I dislike people who shift work onto others. 
>>I dislike people who pass their responsibilities onto others.
Some people obviously don't want to do any work. 
>>Correct
OR: Some people prefer to avoid work.
Everyone don't really want to do work but they need to do that, so they just stand it. 
>>Everyone doesn't really want to work, but they need to do that, so they do it anyway.
And I don't like criticism without solution. 
>>Correct
OR: And I don't like criticism that doesn't come with a solution.

I think repeated refusal annoy everyone. 
>>I think repeated refusal annoys everyone.
We need to share our idea freely and get a feedback.
>>Correct
OR: We need to share our ideas freely and arrive at a conclusion.
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