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My younger self will be surprised to see me making a plan before doing things. When I was young, I was spontaneous person who lives life as it flows without specific plans. Because of this I frequently had to rush to finish things before the deadline. In spite of these experiences, I didn't even try to enhance my personality because it was not that big deal to me, since the works that I have to do was light things that do not count much. Instead, I was kind of proud of myself how I can live happily without making a much effort.
As I become older and things that I have to control all by myself increased, I found out that I could not survive without planning. I'm now a person who prefers to make plans before starting something new, and I think my younger self would be surprised about how diligently I changed.

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Hello, Ms. WooIn! That's relatable. As responsibilities grow and life becomes more complicated, that carefree mindset doesn't always work anymore. It¡¯s cool that you adapted not because you had to "fix" something, but because life naturally pushed you to evolve. Your younger self would also respect the way you've grown into someone who takes charge of their life while still remembering what it felt like to go with the flow.
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My younger self will be surprised to see me making a plan before doing things. 
>>My younger self would be surprised to see me making plans before doing anything.
When I was young, I was spontaneous person who lives life as it flows without specific plans. 
>>When I was young, I was a spontaneous person who lived life as it flowed, without making specific plans.
Because of this I frequently had to rush to finish things before the deadline. 
>>Because of that, I often had to rush to finish things right before the deadline.
In spite of these experiences, I didn't even try to enhance my personality because it was not that big deal to me, since the works that I have to do was light things that do not count much.
>>Despite these experiences, I didn¡¯t try to change my personality, it didn¡¯t seem like a big deal to me at the time, since most of the tasks I had were light and didn¡¯t really matter much.
Instead, I was kind of proud of myself how I can live happily without making a much effort.
>>In fact, I was somewhat proud of how I could live happily without putting in much effort.
As I become older and things that I have to control all by myself increased, I found out that I could not survive without planning. 
>>But as I got older and the things I had to manage on my own increased, I realized that I couldn¡¯t get by without proper planning.
I'm now a person who prefers to make plans before starting something new, and I think my younger self would be surprised about how diligently I changed.
>>Now, I¡¯m someone who prefers to make a plan before starting something new, and I think my younger self would be surprised by how much I¡¯ve changed and how diligently I live now.
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