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Do you believe animals experience trauma the same way humans do?

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2025-06-05 21

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I think animals trauma is more serious than humans.
They couldn't know the reason bad human did and also,
why they had to face the situation.
However, they always open thier mind widely to the offenders , even though
they got seriously hurts outside and inside.
But, It is not possible to do in humans case.
In this part, cure of hurt , It seems like feeling worse humans than animals.

Hello. Elly.
Today's weather is really nice.
Softly windy and sunny.
I feel like that It's real spring season.
But, It will be changed soon, at noon.
Tomorrow is holiday, even though you said PWENG will have classes.
See you in this English class.
Have a nice day.
Thank you.

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Hi Stella, 
As always, thank you for taking the time to answer this essay. :)
I totally agree with you. I believe that animals can forgive more easily than humans, despite what they've been through. I think they are truly wonderful creatures because they always have such big hearts. :)
It's good to know that the weather was nice today! I think it's crazy how quickly the weather can change. Please take care of your health since when the weather changes this fast, people can get sick easily. 
Let's talk a lot later. See you! :)
- Teacher Elly~


I think animals trauma is more serious than humans.
>> I think animal trauma is more serious than human trauma.

They couldn't know the reason bad human did and also, why they had to face the situation.
>> They couldn¡¯t understand why humans did bad things to them, or why they had to face such situations.

However, they always open thier mind widely to the offenders , even though they got seriously hurts outside and inside.
>> However, they always keep their minds open to the offenders, even though they suffer serious injuries both physically and emotionally.
 
But, It is not possible to do in humans case.
>> However, it is not possible in the case of humans.

In this part, cure of hurt , It seems like feeling worse humans than animals.
>>In this regard, healing from injury seems to be more difficult for humans than for animals.

Hello. Elly.
>> Hello, Elly.

Today's weather is really nice. 
Softly windy and sunny.
>> 
Today's weather is really nice. It's softly, windy, and sunny.

I feel like that It's real spring season. But, It will be changed soon, at noon.
>> 
It feels like the real spring season, but it will change soon, around noon.

Tomorrow is holiday, even though you said PWENG will have classes.
>> Tomorrow is a holiday, even though you said PWENG will have classes.

See you in this English class.
>> CORRECT
OR >> See you in our English class. 


Have a nice day. 
Thank you.
>> CORRECT
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