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HOMEWORK FOR 06/05 Writing Task: How do your interests affect your goals?

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Writing Task: How do your interests affect your goals?

To be honest, interests sometimes make it harder to achieve my goals. Enjoying interests is good, but it is bad to be addicted. It could disturb me to focus on the goal. That¡¯s why I think self controlling is one of the most important strengths to get what you want.

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I see what you mean, Lily!

Interests are fun, but they can be distracting. I agree that balance is important, enjoying your interests can be motivating, but too much can become a distraction.

- Kristine ^^ 

To be honest, interests sometimes make it harder to achieve my goals.
>> Honestly, my interests can sometimes get in the way of reaching my goals.
Enjoying interests is good, but it is bad to be addicted.
>> It's good to enjoy your interests, but getting addicted to them can be harmful.
It could disturb me to focus on the goal.
>> It could distract me from focusing on my goals.
That¡¯s why I think self controlling is one of the most important strengths to get what you want.
>> That¡¯s why I believe self-control is one of the key strengths needed to reach your goals.
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