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Writing task: What song always lifts your mood no matter what?
I like this question because I'm a big fan of Redvelvet who is one of a K-POP groups.
Their songs are wide spectrum from upbeat songs to downbeat.
When I listened their upbeat songs, I feel better especially in sunny day.
Redvelvet have five members and their harmony is the best of the K-POP groups.
I listened their songs when I commuted to the university.
Since my commute time is quite long, I feel that the time go faster and get an energy if l listened their youthful songs,
They won't release some new songs because they are already 10 years group.
But I will continue to listen to their music.

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Hello, Ms. Lina! I love them and their music, too! It¡¯s sweet how their songs became part of your daily routine, like during your commute to university. Long commutes can be tiring, but listening to music you love can make it feel lighter and more enjoyable.
-T. Sonny 
I like this question because I'm a big fan of Redvelvet who is one of a K-POP groups.
>>I like this question because I¡¯m a big fan of Red Velvet, one of the K-pop groups.
Their songs are wide spectrum from upbeat songs to downbeat.
>>Their songs have a wide range, from upbeat to slower, more emotional ones.
When I listened their upbeat songs, I feel better especially in sunny day.
>>When I listen to their upbeat songs, I feel better, especially on sunny days.
Redvelvet have five members and their harmony is the best of the K-POP groups.
>>Red Velvet has five members, and I think their harmony is one of the best in all of K-pop.
I listened their songs when I commuted to the university.
>>I used to listen to their songs while commuting to university.
Since my commute time is quite long, I feel that the time go faster and get an energy if l listened their youthful songs,
>> Since my commute was quite long, their youthful songs made the time pass more quickly and gave me energy.
They won't release some new songs because they are already 10 years group.
>>They might not release many new songs now, since they¡¯ve been together for over 10 years.
But I will continue to listen to their music.
>>But I¡¯ll keep listening to their music no matter what.
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