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My country new president is very good because he is peace of Korea and economic growth is a promise.
So now President is very good.

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Here's your corrected composition, Jimmy.  Please take a look at the corrections below. Have a good evening there! 


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My country new president is very good because he is peace of Korea and economic growth is a promise.
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