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My country new president is very good because he is peace of Korea and economic growth is a promise.
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My country new president is very good because he is peace of Korea and economic growth is a promise.
So now President is very good.
>>> The new president of my country is excellent because he prioritizes peace in Korea and has promised economic growth. His leadership brings hope for a better future.
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