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Share one story you\'ve read about the moon.

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Moon about famous story is not water in the moon and not live rabbit on the moon.
So everything animal is not live on the moon.

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Here's your corrected composition, Jimmy.  Please take a look at the corrections below. Have a good afternoon there! 


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Moon about famous story is not water in the moon and not live rabbit on the moon.
So everything animal is not live on the moon.
>> The famous story about the moon is not true - there is no water, and no rabbit living on it. In fact, no animals can survive on the moon.
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