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Share one story you\'ve read about the moon.

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Moon about famous story is not water in the moon and not live rabbit on the moon.
So everything animal is not live on the moon.

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Here's your corrected composition, Jimmy.  Please take a look at the corrections below. Have a good afternoon there! 


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                                Share one story you've read about the moon.


Moon about famous story is not water in the moon and not live rabbit on the moon.
So everything animal is not live on the moon.
>> The famous story about the moon is not true - there is no water, and no rabbit living on it. In fact, no animals can survive on the moon.
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