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Do you think visiting new places is more enjoyable alone or with others? Why?

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I find it more enjoyable to visit new places with others. This is because I can share and reminisce about the experiences and impressions we had together. On the other hand, some people think that traveling alone is freer and more comfortable. Still, it can be a bit lonely when there is no one to truly appreciate the memories I made on my own. I love traveling abroad and have done so both alone and with others. However, the most unforgettable memories are those I have shared with others. Staying in unfamiliar places with others might lead to some conflicts and uncomfortable situations. Yet, adjusting plans and resolving problems together made the trip more special. Furthermore, others can help me take more pictures. It would be difficult to take photos by myself. In addition, traveling with others broadens my perspectives, as I discover different interests and lifestyles through them. Thus, if you want to enjoy all these benefits, don't hesitate to explore new places with others.

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I find it more enjoyable to visit new places with others. 
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This is because I can share and reminisce about the experiences and impressions we had together. 
>> Correct
On the other hand, some people think that traveling alone is freer and more comfortable. 
>> Correct
Still, it can be a bit lonely when there is no one to truly appreciate the memories I made on my own. 
>> Correct
I love traveling abroad and have done so both alone and with others. 
>> Correct
However, the most unforgettable memories are those I have shared with others. 
>> Correct
Staying in unfamiliar places with others might lead to some conflicts and uncomfortable situations. 
>> Correct
Yet, adjusting plans and resolving problems together made the trip more special. 
>> Correct
Furthermore, others can help me take more pictures. 
>> Correct
It would be difficult to take photos by myself. 
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In addition, traveling with others broadens my perspectives, as I discover different interests and lifestyles through them. 
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Thus, if you want to enjoy all these benefits, don't hesitate to explore new places with others.
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