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How should parents support their children\'s playtime?

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I'm always thinking about this topic because I know there are involved many good points as is known well.
But I used to tell my son to do his homework first, and then you can go out to play with his friends.
After saying this, I would feel sad and painful this kind of aspect.
Their childhood must not too long as we did.
I already passed the same season as my son and knew how much fun to him this time.
However I think that I have to do my role as parent on his habbit.
These kind of points are arguing in my mind at every moments.

Hello Elly.
Today is very nice. but It's a bit hot.
I suddenly had overwork on the English class day.
So I had to cancel the time. So sorry.
See you on today's class.
Have a nice daytime.
Thank you.

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Hi Stella,
As always, thank you for taking the time to answer this essay. :)
Absolutely! Time flies so quickly before you know it, your son is no longer a little boy. We can¡¯t turn back time, so he should to cherish every moment while it lasts. I believe he will be able to relive a lot of good childhood memories when he's older.
Also, stay hydrated all the time. Summer heat is exhausting, so take care of yourself. :)
No worries at all! Thank you for letting me know. See you later. :)
- Teacher Elly~


I'm always thinking about this topic because I know there are involved many good points as is known well.
>> I'm always thinking about this topic because I know it involves many good points that are well known

But I used to tell my son to do his homework first, and then you can go out to play with his friends.
>> But I used to tell my son to do his homework first, and then he could go out to play with his friends.

After saying this, I would feel sad and painful this kind of aspect.
>> After saying this, I would feel sad and hurt about this kind of situation.

Their childhood must not too long as we did.
>> Their childhood might not be as long as ours was.

I already passed the same season as my son and knew how much fun to him this time.
>> I've already gone through the same stage as my son and know how much fun this time is for him.

However I think that I have to do my role as parent on his habbit.
>> However, I think I have to fulfill my role as a parent regarding his habits.

These kind of points are arguing in my mind at every moments.
>> These kinds of thoughts are always on my mind.
OR >> These conflicting thoughts are constantly in my mind.

Hello Elly.
>> CORRECT

Today is very nice. but It's a bit hot.
>> Today is very nice, but it's a bit hot.
OR >> The weather is nice today, though it's a little hot.

I suddenly had overwork on the English class day.
>> I suddenly had extra work on the day of my English class.

So I had to cancel the time. So sorry.
>> So I had to cancel the class. I'm really sorry.
OR >> I had to cancel the session. Sorry about that.

See you on today's class.
>> See you in today's class

Have a nice daytime.
>> Have a nice day!

Thank you.
>> CORRECT
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