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Can allowing too much freedom sometimes lead to problems? Why or why not?

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Many philisopher already studied about this questions.
Following their theory, if we would allow all freedom, it could invade other's freedom.
So we can't allow all freedom.
We gave up and handover some freedom to somegroup. then, we recieved safety.
That is a origin of nation.

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Hi there! It¡¯s great to see you completed the homework. You shared your ideas beautifully—keep up the amazing work!^^
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Many philisopher already studied about this questions.
>> Many philosophers have already studied these questions.

Following their theory, if we would allow all freedom, it could invade other's freedom.
>> According to their theories, if we allow complete freedom, it could interfere with other people's freedom.

So we can't allow all freedom.
>> That's why we can't allow unlimited freedom.

We gave up and handover some freedom to somegroup. then, we recieved safety.
>> We gave up and handed over some of our freedom to a group in exchange for safety.

That is a origin of nation.
>> That is the origin of the nation.
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