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What do you think companies could do to keep their staff from leaving?

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If the company give enough compensations to the employees, they wouldn't leave there.
The compensation doesn't mean money right now.
If the company can give the hope that company will give income more in the future, employees wouldn't leave easliy.

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Hi! I'm so pleased you took the time to complete the homework. You did an excellent job sharing your experiences and ideas—keep up the great work!^^
~~Teacher Ryka^^


If the company give enough compensations to the employees, they wouldn't leave there.
>> If the company gives enough compensation to the employees, they wouldn¡¯t leave.

The compensation doesn't mean money right now.
>> Compensation doesn¡¯t only mean money right now.

If the company can give the hope that company will give income more in the future, employees wouldn't leave easliy.
>> If the company can give them hope that their income will increase in the future, employees won¡¯t leave easily.
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